Thursday, May 3, 2012

blog 10

Bring the oldest child is an important role in a family. Your birth order can affect a child development .Parents tend to expect their oldest child more responsible. Taking a leadership role, watching out for the younger ones. I agree with the author’s idea “An important part of his identity is his family position . Family is a like a chain of command .You have the father the head of the house then the mother. Follow by the oldest child. All together create a family a group that’s related.The younger sibling is always going to think about himself as the baby. He knows doesn’t have big responsibilities. The youngest is always going to have help. Then come the middle child .In my opinion the middle child is the brains.Dont relied on others siblings only if their really need help.The oldest think about himself as a leader.Pareants tend to put a lot of responsibilities on the on oldest child.The oldest must know how to take care of the younger sibling . when the parents are not around they have to look out and make right decisions. Growing up as the oldest my parents put a lot of responsibilities on me.I would pick up my younger sibling for school. Protect them from harm. My youngest brother tends to be more lay back . I think your birth order does affect your life adjustment. If I wasn’t the oldest I believe I wouldn’t be as independent as I am today. Your birth order is apart of your character

1 comment:

  1. 1. Does the essay do a good job offering a summary of the article?
    a. The essay shows great understanding of the passage, however extensive details are not provided to convey the writers point of view in regards to his essay.
    2. Does the essay have a thesis?
    a. Yes the essay has a thesis. Touches upon the thesis but does not elaborate on his view points with examples of his position in regards to the essay.
    3. Is there adequate downshifting in each of the body paragraphs? What level? Give evidence
    a. Level four is reaches in the passage, with an example and reference of a specific time being provided. Overall the essay is quite short. Needs at least 2 more points of view to support the thesis. Elaborating on each point of view in a paragraph, downshifting within that paragraph.

    4. Is there a good essay structure--one introductory paragraph, 2-3 body paragraphs, and a conclusion?
    i. The essay consists of a combination of the introduction first paragraph and the conclusion, summed up into one big paragraph consisting of 260+ words.

    5. Is the thesis supported by the evidence?
    a. The thesis is mildly support by evidence it could use two more points supporting the thesis, which will provide you with at least or two more paragraphs.

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